Oh dear, oh dear, oh dear
This looks very sad
What’s happened here?
I think it’s something bad!
Someone has drowned
It might be someone I know
Everybody is sound
Their feelings are not to show.
As the body is lifted out
I look at the face
I need to shout
It is my best friend Trace
Her face is pale
As pale as snow
I have well and truly failed
I have let her go
I say my very last goodbye
Ha, she can’t hear me
Why did she have to suddenly die?
I can safely say, I’m teary.
100 Word Spelling 
WOW Sophie, this is awesome writing! This is the first poetry response I have ever read and it is a touching one indeed. You have created and somber and serious mood in this text and it is gripping for the reader.
Keep up this high standard of writing!
Mary (Team 100WC)
Australia
this is a really good poem , I love the way you use rhymes and made it seem mysterious , well done and keep entering the 100 word challenge .
I love your poem Sophie. I noticed you used a simile and that created the right image in my head of pale snow. I love the rhymes you used they are amazing, well done!
Nice one Sophie.
I also like the way you have used rhymes.
Well done.
What made you want to right a poem?
I thought I would see what the feel is so I know what to write next time.
Well done, I like the way you made your poem rhyme . It was an interesting read.
Wow Sophie!You have put lodes of work in to that. I can tell you have remembered the stuff that we have learned at school.Also I noticed the pattern goes A,B,A,B.Well done for using a simile. Maybe next time you could use personification or onomatopoeia.
Wow! I too have never read a poetry entry! well done! and I love that it rhymes!
Well done Sophie! I like the way you used the rhymes, I noticed you used the ABAB pattern. And I like how interesting your poem is.
Well done Sophie I like all the rhymes. It is very funny and a bit sad good use of ABAB.
I can see you put a ton of work into this, as most have said, you have a use of ABAB, keep up the good work!